Does "Both are not free but one had freedom" make sense?

I know it probably doesnt make sense but it sounds very poetic and would be perfect for my story if it makes sense or:I know it probably doesn't make

I know it probably doesn't make sense but it sounds very poetic and would be perfect for my story if it makes sense

or:I know it probably doesn't make sense but it sounds very poetic and would be perfect for my story if it makes sense


or:I can't tell what you are trying to say, but that's not the way to say it.

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