Is this any good,i need help with this song?
Im trying to write a song and im wondering if this is any good,any advice and ideads would be awesome..He gets a call in afghanistan from his beautifu
Im trying to write a song and im wondering if this is any good,any advice and ideads would be awesome..He gets a call in afghanistan from his beautiful wife,she tells him she had their baby girl at 12:05 last night,she said she has your nose and she has your eyes,and sure puts up a hell of a fight,and at that very moment her husband smiles and says baby dont you worrie ill be alright,that was the last time she would ever talk to him,because later that night a suicide bommer killed all of them,when she heard the news she died inside,and now its 18 years later and their little girl is all grown up and is on her way to deploy in afghanistan ,they ride in scilence and tears because they know whats at hand,as she leavs she says mom i know i hav his nose and i have his eyes you tell me that all the time but i just want you to know ill be alright,she smiles and says dont you forget that
or:Im trying to write a song and im wondering if this is any good,any advice and ideads would be awesome..He gets a call in afghanistan from his beautiful wife,she tells him she had their baby girl at 12:05 last night,she said she has your nose and she has your eyes,and sure puts up a hell of a fight,and at that very moment her husband smiles and says baby dont you worrie ill be alright,that was the last time she would ever talk to him,because later that night a suicide bommer killed all of them,when she heard the news she died inside,and now its 18 years later and their little girl is all grown up and is on her way to deploy in afghanistan ,they ride in scilence and tears because they know whats at hand,as she leavs she says mom i know i hav his nose and i have his eyes you tell me that all the time but i just want you to know ill be alright,she smiles and says dont you forget that
or:i think its good and hopefully you can give it a nice melody
